The script - final draft

Here is our final script after making the appropriate changes

Script Development

Here is the first draft of the script for the radio drama. We performed our script to the rest of our class members and they gave us some audience feedback....

This image above if the first page of the script. After performing this part of the drama to the audience we recieved some comments. Many listeners felt that the use of bad language such as "fuck" was not needed and was too harsh to use in this radio drama. Although, the listeners did say that they felt some language was acceptable such as the use of the word "shit". Also, the listeners commented on the radio announcements. They felt that the announcements were too long and contained too many information. They said that we needed to shorten these annoucments in order to cause more of an impact on the listeners

The image above is the second page of our first draft of the radio drama script. The listeners commented on the conflicting relationship between Stephanie and Elizabeth and said that it encouraged them to keep listening. They also said that the sudden car crash shocked them. Personally, I think that this is a very ood reaction from the audience as this is what I aimed to do from the start and shock the audience. The listeners also mentioned that they enjoyed how the sat nav helps the story un fold.

The image above is the third page of the first draft of our radio drama script. The listeners said that they felt confused at the point when the brakes were applied. Because of this, I have decided to either remove this or re arrange some parts and see which will work best for my audience.

The image above is the forth page of the first draft of the radio drama script. I recieved some critisism from the listeners about the use of bad language, and again felt that the use of the word "fuck" and "pussy" was unacceptable to use in radio dramas as they were too harsh. Because of this, I have decided to remove these words and replace them with something more suitable. Also, the audience said that they felt there were too many news notifications on the radio which made the drama seem unrealistic. Because of this point, I have decided to remove the news notification from this page.

The image above is the fifth page of the first draft of our radio drama script. The listeners said that they were hoping for a strong ending, something that shocked them and suggested that we implied a theme of death within the end part.

In conclusion, the listeners enjoyed the overall idea of our story but felt the use of bad language was not at all needed. They thought that the story would still work with fewers news notifications helping to tell the story. Also, the listeners wanted a dramatic ending with great impact. I will take all of these points into consideration when constructing my second draft of the radio drama script.

The Setting

We as a group, have decided that the majority of the episode will be set in Stephanie’s car, and rest will be set just outside of the car after the girls have hit something. Because of this, we will only have to consider so many sound effects to make it sound realistic

Sound Effects
As the entire episode is set inside the car and outside, we will need to select relevant sound effects
here are some possible sound effects that could be used

• engine noises
• horns
• music on radio
• news announcements on radio
• a sound to demonstrate the impact of the crash

Character profiles

After drawing up the character mind maps, I have been able to construct the characters own profile. The profiles reveal the characters personalities, what they are into and whether they are protagonist, adversary etc.

Elizabeth - The Protagonist
Elizabeth is an extremely bright 19 year old who is studying Law and Philosophy at Manchester University. She has immaculate long brown hair, brown eyes and wears designer clothes; a factor which makes her much cooler than the average stereotypical geek. She lives in Oxford with her parents and older brother, Edward, and in her spare time, enjoys fencing, playing the piano and shopping in the Westfield Mall in London. She doesn’t give into peer pressure and is sensible, almost always opting for better safe than sorry.

Stephanie - The Adversary
Stephanie is an intelligent 22 year old that works at Vogue as a personal assistant to her boss. As her work environment is competitive and bitchy, Stephanie fits in perfectly. She has mid length red hair and brown eyes. She lives in Oxford with her former boyfriend, Mark. Stephanie envies anyone who out smarts here. She enjoys taking risks and likes to live life on the “wild side”. When not at work, Stephanie can be found partying in various city nightclubs with friends. She is also very pushy and prefers to remain in control. This girl is not afraid to speak her mind, under any circumstances.

Katie - The Victim
Katie is 19 years old and attends the University of Manchester. Katie also studies Law and Philosophy, along with her friend Elizabeth. Katie isn't the brightest of girls, and tends to follow the crowd and aims to impress people. A lot of the time, Katie will give into peer pressue and do what others want to do, like she doesn't have a mind of her own. Katie lives at home with her Mum, in Oxford. She has an older sister called Stephanie who Katie aspires to be like.